it's alright
it'd be a lott better if you used more instruments than the single phazing saw lead though... you know, to help change it up. you said it's not dnb, which excludes your excuse of keeping it simple, especially if it's supposed to be breakbeat.
it'd help a lot if you changed up the drums. changed them up a lot. there's almost no fills at all throughout the song, and the one that you DO have is repeated every 8th measure! my being a drummer really helps in drum transitions, so if you ever need any assistance with that sort of thing, just pm me.
also, one last thing, try throwing some bass in there. even if it's techno or breakbeat or whatever, there still needs to be at least SOME bass in there lol.
overall what you did with what you have earns you a 5 and a 10, but i honestly think if you go all the way, you could create one of the greatest masterpieces this website has ever seen.
great!